Warning, the story is on adultfanfiction.net, so it has a NC-17 rating.PERPETRATOR: Dark oneSUMMARY: Todd leaves the brotherhood...can it get beetter for him or is he doomed to his pathetic life Angst,Language,M/F PROBLEM #1:
As you can tell by the summary, the author can't spell and regards punctuation as optional, especially commas. Our old pal 'Rouge' makes an appearance.
We also have way too much inner monologue and the author is a member of the department for redundancy department.PROBLEM #2:
Toad is so out of character, it hurts. He goes from the rather self-centered person from canon to the savior of the helpless. It seems to make him act rather stupid though and not the kind of stupid that would be in character for him. Oh, and he voluntarily takes a shower.PROBLEM #3:
While some would already regard Todd/Rogue as a crack pairing worthy of reporting, this is not what boggled my mind. Oh no, if it was only that.
See, as all bad author, Dark one needed to make the old love interest look unappealing. This seems rather pointless since Wanda doesn't love Todd back anyway, but she still did. And how did she do it, you might ask. By pairing her up with another male of the Brotherhood... the Blob. Yes, you read that right, the author graced us with the first ever Fred/Wanda sex scene.
CONNECTIONS TO CANON: Lots of characters that have the same name as canon characters, but act nothing like them. Or any real person for that matter.
NOTES: It just too much not to share it with you all. Behold! And try not to let your brain dribble all over your keyboard.( Not safe for work or minds: Blob has sex with WandaCollapse )
If anyone cares to read a good Todd/Rogue fic, read this: Objects in the Rearview Mirror
. A song-fic, but a good one, also rated NC-17.